ASH (galerian_ash) wrote in linguaphiles,
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English wording

I'm having some major problems with wording a sentence. What I'm trying to get across is that the subject has been daydreaming about what his first kiss will be like, yet he's been denying that he has. Argh, I can't even properly explain it here!

This is what I initially wrote:

It was a first for them, and it felt just as nice as he'd pretended he'd never imagined it would.

Which I then changed into:

It was a first for them, and felt just as nice as he'd been pretending he had never imagined it would.

But that sounds even worse -- which is quite a feat, considering that the first sounded utterly confusing! Help, please? I really don't know how to salvage this sentence, and I don't want to scrap it altogether.
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