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Translation of a poem from Japanese into English

This is my recent favorite poem. Mizuumi (The Lake) by a famous Japanese poet, late Ms Ibaragi Noriko.

I’ve translated it into English, but as always, something is missing. Roughly the poem in Japanese says something like that, but especially the poem is really hard to translate...coz I have to read between the line and need to express the air which the author wanted to express without the direct words...and also make up a rhyme is important. Please give me some advice! Thanks!

みずうみ…

<だいたいお母さんてものはさ/ しいん /としたところがなくちゃいけないんだ>
名台詞を聴くものかな!
お母さんだけとはかぎらない/人間は誰でも心の底に/しいんと静かな湖を持つべきなのだ/
田沢湖のように深く青い湖を/かくし持っているひとは/話すとわかる 二言 三言で
それこそ/しいんと落ちついて/容易に増えも減りもしない自分の湖/
さらさらと他人の降りてはゆけない魔の湖
教養や学歴とはなんの関係もないらしい/人間の魅力とは/
たぶんその湖のあたりから/発する霧だ
早くもそのことに/気づいたらしい/小さな/二人の/娘たちよ  …「おんなのことば」より

The lake

‘You know...the ideal mother should be calm and silent’
Oh I heard nice words!
Well....It’s not just the characteristics for the ideal type of mothers
But also for everyone
We all need to have a silent lake deep in our heart
I can tell who owns that lake
Those who have a lake secretly inside their heart, a silent lake just like Tazawa, deep and blue
I can tell who is the one by just exchanging a few words with him/her
She is someone who is completely calm and quiet
and her lake would neither increases nor decreases
her only lake
The lake which no one can step in easily, a lake of devil
Seems education and qualification are not important for the lake
One’s charm is probably coming from there
The fog would probably emit from there
They already discovered that
My dear two small daughters...
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