dontsaynothin. (upupabove) wrote in linguaphiles,

Italian Poem


So ... I had to write a poem for my Italian class, and I just wanted to make sure that everything in the poem makes sense, I guess. What with poetic license and all it's not totally clear cut what should or should not be used, and I'm not asking for advice on my literary style (I don't write poems well in English, so this certainly isn't a masterpiece) but I more just want to make sure that I didn't like ..use the wrong preposition after a verb, or use a verb in such a way that even within the context of a poem sounds weird and sounds like I probably meant something else. I'd appreciate it a lot if anyone could help me out!

Heres the poem:

queste anche non sono adatte per le tue mani,
loro sono intese per muoversi liberamente.
queste gambe sono così robuste come gli alberi,
loro sono intese per correre via col vento.
questa schiena non romperà a causa del tuo peso-
sorge con il sole, e tramonta per niente.
questi piedi, come radici, appartengono la terra,
neanche la tua presa forte potrebbe strapparli via.
questi occhi hanno lustro in assenza della luce,
e la tua ombra non potrebbe vincerli.
questa mente non può essere confinato di
la tua definizione di una donna.
allora, ascolta - ascoltami.

so che tu pensi che sia tuo, ma-
non ho nessuna intenzione di essere la proprietà.

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